Wow, that's a lot going on here, it might take me some time to properly go through and adjust but I will get back to you as soon as possible.PhoenixDayne wrote: ↑Sat Mar 09, 2019 10:14 amNormally, we don't lose control over our shikai element but elaborate on it.Phantom-T wrote: ↑Wed Mar 06, 2019 3:16 amBANKAIName: Shisou Mokushiroku
Element: Darkness & Shadow
Release command: Pour forth from the depths of the abyss and consume the light which dwells within their hearts. Shisou Mokushiroku… BANKAI!!!
Phase 1: On activation, Shisou radiates a cold wind which shatters its constitution, disintegrating it into multiple shards of black glass which drops to the ground. These glass shards quickly sip into the earth inform of liquid matter while Hazuki suffers a deadly cause that riddles his hands with cut marks eventually bleeding him out from each.
Phase 2: A blood moon rises to the sky, causing darkness/night befall the entirety of the battle field for as long as his bankai remains active. From the risen moon, four samurai horsemen (War, Famine, Virus and Death) clad in all black would be seen and heard ridding down from the sky as they move to join their summoner Hazuki (the shadow of death).
Appearance: During the rise of the blood moon, Darkness rises from the earth coating the shinigami with its essence to manifest the shape and form of a samurai armor usually dawn by samurais prepared for war. A giant curvy blade 3ft tall manifests behind the Shinigami with his face and hair covered from view by a samurai mask. His eyes also takes a new glow, changing from its black and golden nature to a daunting red glow. A black tarthered cape attached to the edges of his shoulder blade then hangs loosely behind him.
- Hazuki wounds are superficial and as such don’t hinder the use of his hands in any manner and/or form.
- The bloods which drain out of the wounds are however not, and will remain constant, continuously dripping from him for as long as his Bankai remains active.
- The Horsemen whom approach from the clouds are also superficial as they can only be seen & heard by those Hazuki considers foe, while they are only heard by others.
- An interaction with the horsemen would have the opponent swinging at a body of dark cloud which retains its shape no matter the attack thrown at it.
- They also cannot physically attack the enemy but they can attack Hazuki should he summon them without possessing sufficient spiritual wealth (A and above reiatsu).
- 15 posts after bankai is activated, Hazuki drops down and collapses as a result of adverse blood loss deactivating his bankai in the process.
The horsemen adorn similar outfit while their horses appear heavily armored. Each horseman carries with them a unique tool of war, which they gift Hazuki when the time is right.
War carries with him a blade unlike any ever seen before
[*]Famine carries with him a chain net with multiple layers which is hooked to his waist belt.
[*]Virus carries with him a gas Bomb which seats by the two sides of his horses bag patch
[*]Death carries with him a sealed scroll/book which has the seal of a skull engraved on-top of it.
Note: On activation of bankai Hazuki gains 1+ to his durability stats, He doesn’t lose control of his shikai element but rather tends to intensify its influence over a wider range and with better power and speed. Bankai activation occurs within two posts and as such cannot be applied till the third post.
Death shadow: Apocalypse:
In Bankai, a talisman which has 4 missing orb appear at the base line of Hazuki’s chest on top his armor plating where it would be spotted engraved into its fabrics. These circular talisman acts as a hosting agent for Hazuki strength and a link between the Shinigami and the four horsemen.
The Horsemen act as Individual forces of nature which affects Hazuki’s skill based on the gifts they bare. This Gifts which is physically represented by the weapon they bare Transforms into circular orbs with distinctive colors which they stab into the Shinigami chest from his back. Once this ritual is complete the said orb manifest on Hazuki’s chest with the same glow it had after transformation, completing that particular missing puzzle in the talisman.
Depending on Hazukis Reiatsu and zanpaktou mastery, the Shinigami can only Have 4 or none active at a time.
Any reaitsu lower than the above mentioned will result to a severe beating by the Horsemen, or an effect-less Bankai sealed for the next 4 summons.
- At full zanpaktou mastery
A reiatsu: 1 orb
A+ reiatsu: 2 orb
S reiatsu: 3 orb
S+ reiatsu: 4 orb
I don't get. He can have only 4 or nothing? What then is the use of your reiatsu requirement? Or mayhaps, you meant he'd have a min of 0 and Max of 4?
Just those, your zanpakuto is interesting.
AbilitiesName: Blades of war [Sword]
Release Command: Behead
Description: Once activated, Hazukis control over darkness intensifies, giving him the ability to control, shape and manipulate darkness, blackness and even shadows in any manner and form he sees fit for defensive and offensive reasons.
- Hazuki can shape darkness into a particular form or weapon of his choice.
- Darkness within 15 meters of him is easily influenced by his presence and as such can easily sprout into action if he wills them.
- He could also Change the form of his blade, from a curvy 3ft blade to any other blade or melee weapon which he has seen that suits his fancy.
- Without any existing darkness or shadow, Hazuki can manifest dark blades, dark orbs, or various other melee weapons from thin air over a distance of 5 meters around him, which he can project forward or cluster together depending on the situation at hand.
- Manifested weapons can range from 1 to a 100 and usually materialize from dark portals made present around him.
- His shadows are steel solid and laser sharp when retaining a particular solid state and can adopt other forms such as liquid and gaseous states which he can disperse over a 500m range.
- Constructs made cannot move faster than Hazuki Innate speed whether physically or mentally manipulated.
Now, now. He'd control and alter the form of liquid shadows over 500m? That's way too much for Bankai without any clear limitation or reason for such? Since blackness is your thang, you'd extend your reach with the presence of preexisting shadows and black hued materials. Still, 500m is vast.
Let me get this straight.
You can retard motion.
While I get the connection between trap and consume, slowing them down? C'mon. There'd be something that links them.
For the first four points, no, those can't fly.
So, reiatsu is only spent to devour skill and constructs that are above yours? No, that won't do.
Having to keep them restrained even with bursting power would requiring reiatsu to be continually expended for those three posts. Not just expended, they'd need to match or most likely be greater than the opposing force.
And!! The next point on consumption, and it'd require an opposing and equivalent amount of reiatsu for such to occur.
No to successive strikes declining their speed further. A level or a certain percentage is enough.
Opponent of equal and greater reiatsu should be able to oppose this Technique or does yours deal with the amount of reiatsu holds?
I just hope you'd redo the limitations.
The rate of gas molecular diffusion starts from rapidly to almost Instantaneously with density being a determinant. Again, wind doesn't have a pace, it occurs any medium or volume it is in instantly. Since it is a gas, when inhaled, I don't think one can mitigate its erosive effect. Again, you make out this ability to be supreme, without any weakness. If an organism housing vast amount of spiritual energy can limitedly mitigate this effect, I wonder what's the fate of those housing lesser spiritual energy. How does one's reiatsu become unstable when all the gas does is erode concept? What concept is he eroding there? Does it mean any technique regardless of the reiatsu behind it can be eroded? Now, now. Don't be like me that'd pack all hax[though there are subtle yet match-deciding Weaknesses only a few would see] and leave out the majority of the limitations. I feel the effect of unsteady reiatsu could be washed out. That is technically affecting an opponent's reiatsu and could lead to a godmod.
Injecting this deadly toxin is basically killing oneself. It wouldn't just negate the durability, as you stated yourself, reiatsu would be unbalanced, cells would erode away. If you want 50% deduction, increase the risk. Losing durability isn't anything, having outstandingly great reiatsu could compensate, not saying durability is useless anyway.
As a hax master myself, this ability is dope. However, the limitations are so few all we'd see is the extreme power oozing out. Yeah, hypocritical, I know. I mostly do that to see various perspectives.
Right now, this ability's limitations needs a rethink.
This gives off the Sung Jin Woo vibe. I could allow this. Infact, I'm allowing this only after the weaknesses has been polished. For zombies and skeleton appearing in their hundreds, how well can your reiatsu fare? To summon the tier 3 character, would your reiatsu account for it? You made all your abilities a whole lot more difficult to review rather than simple reiatsu percentage deductions. Honestly, you need solid limitations. It is what your abilities lack. No risk, no limitations that'd make it even acceptable.
If you take a look at my edited Shikai.
He'd potentially die from using moeru. And that's a technique that drinks a lot of reiatsu and his speed. Not even the other techniques and how much I love kido. While it isn't the perfect example of a zanpakuto, it is decent. Take Fluxarc's, he loses strength, speed and reiatsu overtime.
Overall, I expected the ideas of 'teardrop', 'black mass' and 'Unrequited Sorrow' from you but you have got this amazingly amazing idea and put it into good use. Yeah, amazingly amazing(+_+). If you want to see those techniques, I'd send it to you.
Your abilities needs editing. No, it needs limitations/weaknesses.
I wouldn't exactly deny it, neither would I accept it. Just fix it up, my dood.
Also thanks, would like to hear the ideas you've got while I'm at it. You know the "tear drop", "black mass" and my favourite "Urequited sorrow". Sounds like something I should get my hands on.