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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by konami31 » Thu Nov 29, 2018 11:46 pm

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Reasons: I've waited too long for Phenix to review it and there are certain requirements that needs your attention since you reviewed it back in the old MAV 1.0

Zanpakuto

Sealed State Appearance: A long katana with a cyan hilt and black sheathe, covered by a black scabbard.

Release Appearance: Genshin Shiten takes the form of a long silver blade with a cyan hilt, mainly covered with a cyan aura once released.

Realease command: The released command is ‘collapse’

Spirit personality: the spirit has a serious personality he acts calm and does not seem to be afraid at the prospect of accepting a challenge. Genshin Shiten deeply cares for his master, Wuji. He fears for Wuji's fate about becoming a warrior haunted by loneliness, a process that seems irreversible. When Genshin Shiten is angry, he speaks less. In addition, his fighting style becomes very different. Instead valuing efficiency and using Wudang's martial art skills, his methods become very dirty such as using unorthodox means to achieve victory.

Spirit's appearance: Genshin Shiten has the appearance of a young teen with light blue eyes with white-spiky hair, thin eye brows eyebrows and has slightly tan skin. He wears a long sleeved blue shirt, light beige colored pants and black boots.


Inner world: It is a mountain range that stretched for thousands or even tens of thousands of miles. It is different from ordinary mountains, because it is not situated on the ground but rather pinned itself to the ground. The peaks are inserted into the ground while the base aimed straight for the sky in an unimaginable fashion. With this perspective in mind, the mountain ranges here looked like branches from a great tree taking root in the earth.

Element Type: Profound laws of space and lightning

Name: Domain
Type: Passive
Element: space
Description: Upon release of his zanpakuto, Wuji can create, shape and manipulate the physical aspects of space within an area of 50m with his thoughts in a manner that can be used for both attack and defense within the domain or sphere of influence.And with each punch, kick or swipe of his arms, sword or fingers, Wuji can create spatial distortions, spatial waves and projection in order to inflict damage to the target occupying within the said space. Because it affects the very third-dimension that the target is occupying.When used in combat, the possibility of the damage Wuji can inflict is dependent on the reiatsu and durability of the opponnent.
-At low levels:(kido 1-33) the spatial waves have a knock back force of 10m per level of power .
-At mid levels: (kido 34- 66) the spatial waves have a knock back force of 20m per level of power .
-In its strong form- (kido 67- highest castable kido spell of Wuque)the spatial waves have a knock back force of 50m per level of power .
Name:Void
Element: Space
Type: Passive
Description: When the zanpakuto is active, Wuque can fuse or integrate his body with surrounding space, allowing him to be untraceable while being able to reach any location. But he’s limited In a sense that he can’t be faster than his own shunpo while trying to traverse to a location with this ability. However, Wuji can stay concealed within space for a period of two post if he wishes not to teleport, and he can make conversations but he cannot attack his opponent (and his opponent cannot attack him either) while being fused or merged with space unless he materialized to do so.

Name: Eye of the Void
Element: Space
Type: passive
Description:Upon activation of his zanpakuto, a humongous eye will appear at the void of the vast azure sky looking down upon the world, the eye is connected to Wuque's consciousnesses. Thus, Wuque gains the ability to see in the dark, in illusion and perceive the spatial distances within 4om;the dimensions (length, width and height), distances between objects, shapes and sizes of things or people, he can discern how far away something is and the exact measurements of the proportions of an object.

Name: Tribulation
Element: lightning
Type: Active/passive
Description:This ability is named after Wuji’s middle name and first name upon activation of his zanpakuto, myriad of thunder clouds will begin to gather gradually until a period of five posts. Once in position countless azure lightning will begin to form within it to take the shape of a dragon which will descend to the battle field if commanded by Wuji via pointing to the enemy. This can be described as Wuji’s trump card because it will seal his zanpakuto for two post after use. The might of this attack is no weaker than his highest castable kido attack, being able to destroy an area of 40m.
Note: The thunder cloud can stay up to 6 post before it dissipate

Bankai


Name: True Domain
Type: Passive
Element: space
Description: Upon release of his zanpakuto, Wuque can create, shape and manipulate the physical aspects of space within an area of 50m with his thoughts in a manner that can be used for both attack and defense within the domain or sphere of influence.And with each punch, kick or swipe of his arms, sword or fingers, Wuque can create spatial distortions, spatial waves and projection in order to inflict damage to the target occupying within the said space. Because it affects the very third-dimension that the target is occupying.When used in combat, the possibility of the damage Wuji can inflict is dependent on the reiatsu and durability of the opponent.
-At low levels:(kido 1-33) the spatial waves have a knock back force of 10m per level of power
-At mid levels: (kido 34- 66) the spatial waves have a knock back force of 20m per level of power .
-In its strong form- (kido 67- highest castable kido spell of Wuque)the spatial waves have a knock back force of 50m per level of power .
Name:Void Steps
Element: Space
Type: Passive
Description: in bankai, Wuque retains his ability to fuse with space and to teleport but his speed increases by one level.

Name: Eye of the Void
Element: Space
Type: passive
Description: Once the humongous eye appear at the void of the vast azure sky looking down upon the world. Wuque is not only gifted with the ability to see (in the dark, in illusion and perceive the spatial distances within 4om;the dimensions, distances between objects, shapes and sizes of things or people, he can discern how far away something is and the exact measurements of the proportions of an object). In bankai, the humongous eye allows Wuque's projected attacks to lock and home in on his quarry within 50m.

Name:inverted Realm
Release command: Defy the heavens.........Genshin shintei
Element: Space
Type: Active
Description: the moment Wuque utters the release command, Genshin shintei alters the spatial laws of the world by causing Wuque to emit a spatial waves that spreads outwardly from Wuque's person. Thus anyone that gets in contact with the spatial waves will suffer from visual disruption. Thus, fall victim in an inverted world in which everything appear backwards and inverted, disrupting the targets sense of vision i.e those seen as a foe of Wuji. Thus, any attacks launch by Wuque will come from a reversed direction so that the enemy may find it difficult to see them coming or cannot defend them properly because everything is reversed. This ability can be active for 5 post and it demands 30% of Wuque's reiatsu.

Name:Heavenly Realm
Release command: Seize the heavens .........Genshin shintei
Element: lightning
Type: Active
Description: once active, Genshin shintei fabricates numerous thunder clouds within the cloud of the sky. Thus, enabling Wque to hurl down lightning attacks within the clouds with his thoughts to cause damages to his foes and opponents within 50m. The thunderclouds can be active for 6 post as well and the destructiveness of the lightning attacks cannot exceed Wuque's highest destructive castable kido spell.
-At low levels:(kido 1-33) the violent lightning takes the form of a purple lightning.
-At mid levels: (kido 34- 66) the violent lightning takes the form of an azure lightning.
-In its strong form- (kido 67- highest castable kido spell of Wuque) the lightning becomes pitch black.
Name:Divine Realm
Release command: Adhere to me.........Genshin shintei
Element: space
Type: Active
Description: the moment Wuque uutters the release command, Genshin shintei alters the spatial laws of the world by bending space within 50m around Wuque to disrupt only the target sense of vision, hearing, touching and sense of smell for a period of 6 post if Wuji is higher than his opponent or 5 post if he's equal in reiatsu to the opponent and 4 post if the opponent is higher than him in reiatsu.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by XIII » Fri Nov 30, 2018 1:00 pm

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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by konami31 » Mon Dec 03, 2018 6:27 am

Well then, I will wait till you return..........
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by PhoenixDayne » Tue Dec 04, 2018 6:08 am

I'm truly sorry about the delay in reviews. I've been dealing with RL problems/works, still dealing with them so reviewing will be slower than ever.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by Itsu » Tue Dec 04, 2018 12:28 pm

PhoenixDayne wrote:
Tue Dec 04, 2018 6:08 am
I'm truly sorry about the delay in reviews. I've been dealing with RL problems/works, still dealing with them so reviewing will be slower than ever.
Take your time bro......
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by Itsu » Tue Dec 04, 2018 12:37 pm

RESURRECCION ABILITIES
Elements:

• Sensing
• Telekinesis

Name: Enhanced Previsión (Ultra Instinct)
Type: Released passive ability I
Element: Sensing
Description: In resurrecciòn, Anya’s ability to release pulses that obtain and organize massive amounts of pinpoint accurate information transcends to the extent where she can not only detect abilities or body movements prior to their full manifestation, but can also detect and alert her of imminent threat(s) within a certain radius. The Scorpion queen is capable of attaining such feat as the second anything disturbs the flow of tracking pulses of her ever stable Pesquisa; it transmits the data back to the queen’s mind instantaneously. Ultra instinct is commonly represented as manifesting a tingling feeling at the center of Anya’s head. It also alerts her of abnormalities such as personal threat in proportion to the severity of that threat. This further implies a kind of intelligence, capable of parsing Anya’s surroundings identifying and critically evaluating a possible threat at a preconscious level and furnishing this information immediately into her mind. The said enhanced form of Previsión passively alerts Anya when the threat is within a radius of 20m due to immense concentration of her pulses within the said range, and it can only alert Anya of a single incognizant threat at a time as multiple abnormalities will cause random disturbance in range of perception and bypass its tracking pulses. So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once. This use of this technique is reiatsu demanding as it continuously taps from her existing spiritual energy.


Name: Enhanced Relocation
Type: Released active ability II
Element: Telekinesis
Description: Anya’s resurrecciòn proved to have not only serve as a catalyst but also an amplifying mechanism as her ability to mentally influence the movements of physical object matter has pushed pass her previous limitations in her sealed state. With the aid of her telekinetic ability, the broken beauty can now affect the movement of physical object matter as much as 1½ ton within a radius of 100m, which moves two levels below her hohou speed. So also her mental focus when manipulating multiple objects that total a mass of 0.225 ton at a time has become refined moderately. Meanwhile, a single object that weighs less/equal to 0.225 ton can be influenced with greater ease, and the said object move at a speed one level below her base speed, regardless of the nature of the object matter. Meanwhile, her control over object matter still doesn’t exceed influencing its movements only.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by Shinoda » Sat Dec 08, 2018 12:44 pm

Status: Approved.
Notes: Might want to consider a more lengthy discussion of the weaknesses.
Itsu wrote:
Tue Dec 04, 2018 12:37 pm
RESURRECCION ABILITIES
Elements:

• Sensing
• Telekinesis

Name: Enhanced Previsión (Ultra Instinct)
Type: Released passive ability I
Element: Sensing
Description: In resurrecciòn, Anya’s ability to release pulses that obtain and organize massive amounts of pinpoint accurate information transcends to the extent where she can not only detect abilities or body movements prior to their full manifestation, but can also detect and alert her of imminent threat(s) within a certain radius. The Scorpion queen is capable of attaining such feat as the second anything disturbs the flow of tracking pulses of her ever stable Pesquisa; it transmits the data back to the queen’s mind instantaneously. Ultra instinct is commonly represented as manifesting a tingling feeling at the center of Anya’s head. It also alerts her of abnormalities such as personal threat in proportion to the severity of that threat. This further implies a kind of intelligence, capable of parsing Anya’s surroundings identifying and critically evaluating a possible threat at a preconscious level and furnishing this information immediately into her mind. The said enhanced form of Previsión passively alerts Anya when the threat is within a radius of 20m due to immense concentration of her pulses within the said range, and it can only alert Anya of a single incognizant threat at a time as multiple abnormalities will cause random disturbance in range of perception and bypass its tracking pulses. So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once. This use of this technique is reiatsu demanding as it continuously taps from her existing spiritual energy.


Name: Enhanced Relocation
Type: Released active ability II
Element: Telekinesis
Description: Anya’s resurrecciòn proved to have not only serve as a catalyst but also an amplifying mechanism as her ability to mentally influence the movements of physical object matter has pushed pass her previous limitations in her sealed state. With the aid of her telekinetic ability, the broken beauty can now affect the movement of physical object matter as much as 1½ ton within a radius of 100m, which moves two levels below her hohou speed. So also her mental focus when manipulating multiple objects that total a mass of 0.225 ton at a time has become refined moderately. Meanwhile, a single object that weighs less/equal to 0.225 ton can be influenced with greater ease, and the said object move at a speed one level below her base speed, regardless of the nature of the object matter. Meanwhile, her control over object matter still doesn’t exceed influencing its movements only.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by PhoenixDayne » Mon Dec 10, 2018 6:11 am

Itsu wrote:
Tue Dec 04, 2018 12:37 pm
RESURRECCION ABILITIES
Elements:

• Sensing
• Telekinesis

Name: Enhanced Previsión (Ultra Instinct)
Type: Released passive ability I
Element: Sensing
Description: In resurrecciòn, Anya’s ability to release pulses that obtain and organize massive amounts of pinpoint accurate information transcends to the extent where she can not only detect abilities or body movements prior to their full manifestation, but can also detect and alert her of imminent threat(s) within a certain radius. The Scorpion queen is capable of attaining such feat as the second anything disturbs the flow of tracking pulses of her ever stable Pesquisa; it transmits the data back to the queen’s mind instantaneously. Ultra instinct is commonly represented as manifesting a tingling feeling at the center of Anya’s head. It also alerts her of abnormalities such as personal threat in proportion to the severity of that threat. This further implies a kind of intelligence, capable of parsing Anya’s surroundings identifying and critically evaluating a possible threat at a preconscious level and furnishing this information immediately into her mind. The said enhanced form of Previsión passively alerts Anya when the threat is within a radius of 20m due to immense concentration of her pulses within the said range, and it can only alert Anya of a single incognizant threat at a time as multiple abnormalities will cause random disturbance in range of perception and bypass its tracking pulses. So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once. This use of this technique is reiatsu demanding as it continuously taps from her existing spiritual energy.
Honestly, I have no problems with this. However, you stated not how fast you respond to threats when the data is sent back or did I miss something? I get you're trying to achoeve some 'goku' feats with this, and it is fine for the most part. If the data is transmitted back at an instantaneous rate, does that mean you process and respond at that same instantaneous rate?

Name: Enhanced Relocation
Type: Released active ability II
Element: Telekinesis
Description: Anya’s resurrecciòn proved to have not only serve as a catalyst but also an amplifying mechanism as her ability to mentally influence the movements of physical object matter has pushed pass her previous limitations in her sealed state. With the aid of her telekinetic ability, the broken beauty can now affect the movement of physical object matter as much as 1½ ton within a radius of 100m, which moves two levels below her hohou speed. So also her mental focus when manipulating multiple objects that total a mass of 0.225 ton at a time has become refined moderately. Meanwhile, a single object that weighs less/equal to 0.225 ton can be influenced with greater ease, and the said object move at a speed one level below her base speed, regardless of the nature of the object matter. Meanwhile, her control over object matter still doesn’t exceed influencing its movements only.
My problem, right now, is the range which this stretch to. I foresee many possibilities with just this ability, it looks simple but man, you gotta admit, there's hax within this, lol. Onto the real thing, I believe the speed is moderate, everything else is fine. Does he lose control of the matters in motion when distracted? It is fine, I'm still iffy on the distance it can reach.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by PhoenixDayne » Mon Dec 10, 2018 6:12 am

Please, if I haven't reviewed your ability yet, do notify me in PM. Sorry for the delays and all.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by Itsu » Mon Dec 10, 2018 1:26 pm

PhoenixDayne wrote:
Mon Dec 10, 2018 6:11 am
Itsu wrote:
Tue Dec 04, 2018 12:37 pm
RESURRECCION ABILITIES
Elements:

• Sensing
• Telekinesis

Name: Enhanced Previsión (Ultra Instinct)
Type: Released passive ability I
Element: Sensing
Description: In resurrecciòn, Anya’s ability to release pulses that obtain and organize massive amounts of pinpoint accurate information transcends to the extent where she can not only detect abilities or body movements prior to their full manifestation, but can also detect and alert her of imminent threat(s) within a certain radius. The Scorpion queen is capable of attaining such feat as the second anything disturbs the flow of tracking pulses of her ever stable Pesquisa; it transmits the data back to the queen’s mind instantaneously. Ultra instinct is commonly represented as manifesting a tingling feeling at the center of Anya’s head. It also alerts her of abnormalities such as personal threat in proportion to the severity of that threat. This further implies a kind of intelligence, capable of parsing Anya’s surroundings identifying and critically evaluating a possible threat at a preconscious level and furnishing this information immediately into her mind. The said enhanced form of Previsión passively alerts Anya when the threat is within a radius of 20m due to immense concentration of her pulses within the said range, and it can only alert Anya of a single incognizant threat at a time as multiple abnormalities will cause random disturbance in range of perception and bypass its tracking pulses. So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once. This use of this technique is reiatsu demanding as it continuously taps from her existing spiritual energy.
Honestly, I have no problems with this. However, you stated not how fast you respond to threats when the data is sent back or did I miss something? I get you're trying to achoeve some 'goku' feats with this, and it is fine for the most part. If the data is transmitted back at an instantaneous rate, does that mean you process and respond at that same instantaneous rate?

Name: Enhanced Relocation
Type: Released active ability II
Element: Telekinesis
Description: Anya’s resurrecciòn proved to have not only serve as a catalyst but also an amplifying mechanism as her ability to mentally influence the movements of physical object matter has pushed pass her previous limitations in her sealed state. With the aid of her telekinetic ability, the broken beauty can now affect the movement of physical object matter as much as 1½ ton within a radius of 100m, which moves two levels below her hohou speed. So also her mental focus when manipulating multiple objects that total a mass of 0.225 ton at a time has become refined moderately. Meanwhile, a single object that weighs less/equal to 0.225 ton can be influenced with greater ease, and the said object move at a speed one level below her base speed, regardless of the nature of the object matter. Meanwhile, her control over object matter still doesn’t exceed influencing its movements only.
My problem, right now, is the range which this stretch to. I foresee many possibilities with just this ability, it looks simple but man, you gotta admit, there's hax within this, lol. Onto the real thing, I believe the speed is moderate, everything else is fine. Does he lose control of the matters in motion when distracted? It is fine, I'm still iffy on the distance it can reach.
However, you stated not how fast you respond to threats when the data is sent back or did I miss something?
Yea I think so.
So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once.
The bolded part slightly reveals the instantaneous effect of the ability. The transmitted data triggers a reaction in respect to the obtain information. That's why it could be used against her.

Pertaining the the distance of Enhanced Relocation, I believe since the area of influence of this ability in her sealed state was 50m, her unsealed state (resurecciòn/shikai) is safe to have an extra distance buff. But well, since you don't find it okay to have control over things within that said distance, I'll reduce it to 70m or back to 50m, I really don't have a problem with that, but I hope im not the only one been limited to this distance in shikai.
That said, I'll edit in the part where she could loose control over objects if she gets distracted.

With that are the abilities ready to rumble? :)
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by PhoenixDayne » Mon Dec 10, 2018 2:38 pm

Itsu wrote:
Mon Dec 10, 2018 1:26 pm
PhoenixDayne wrote:
Mon Dec 10, 2018 6:11 am
Itsu wrote:
Tue Dec 04, 2018 12:37 pm
RESURRECCION ABILITIES
Elements:

• Sensing
• Telekinesis

Name: Enhanced Previsión (Ultra Instinct)
Type: Released passive ability I
Element: Sensing
Description: In resurrecciòn, Anya’s ability to release pulses that obtain and organize massive amounts of pinpoint accurate information transcends to the extent where she can not only detect abilities or body movements prior to their full manifestation, but can also detect and alert her of imminent threat(s) within a certain radius. The Scorpion queen is capable of attaining such feat as the second anything disturbs the flow of tracking pulses of her ever stable Pesquisa; it transmits the data back to the queen’s mind instantaneously. Ultra instinct is commonly represented as manifesting a tingling feeling at the center of Anya’s head. It also alerts her of abnormalities such as personal threat in proportion to the severity of that threat. This further implies a kind of intelligence, capable of parsing Anya’s surroundings identifying and critically evaluating a possible threat at a preconscious level and furnishing this information immediately into her mind. The said enhanced form of Previsión passively alerts Anya when the threat is within a radius of 20m due to immense concentration of her pulses within the said range, and it can only alert Anya of a single incognizant threat at a time as multiple abnormalities will cause random disturbance in range of perception and bypass its tracking pulses. So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once. This use of this technique is reiatsu demanding as it continuously taps from her existing spiritual energy.
Honestly, I have no problems with this. However, you stated not how fast you respond to threats when the data is sent back or did I miss something? I get you're trying to achoeve some 'goku' feats with this, and it is fine for the most part. If the data is transmitted back at an instantaneous rate, does that mean you process and respond at that same instantaneous rate?

Name: Enhanced Relocation
Type: Released active ability II
Element: Telekinesis
Description: Anya’s resurrecciòn proved to have not only serve as a catalyst but also an amplifying mechanism as her ability to mentally influence the movements of physical object matter has pushed pass her previous limitations in her sealed state. With the aid of her telekinetic ability, the broken beauty can now affect the movement of physical object matter as much as 1½ ton within a radius of 100m, which moves two levels below her hohou speed. So also her mental focus when manipulating multiple objects that total a mass of 0.225 ton at a time has become refined moderately. Meanwhile, a single object that weighs less/equal to 0.225 ton can be influenced with greater ease, and the said object move at a speed one level below her base speed, regardless of the nature of the object matter. Meanwhile, her control over object matter still doesn’t exceed influencing its movements only.
My problem, right now, is the range which this stretch to. I foresee many possibilities with just this ability, it looks simple but man, you gotta admit, there's hax within this, lol. Onto the real thing, I believe the speed is moderate, everything else is fine. Does he lose control of the matters in motion when distracted? It is fine, I'm still iffy on the distance it can reach.
However, you stated not how fast you respond to threats when the data is sent back or did I miss something?
Yea I think so.
So also, the connection between Anya’s Ultra instinct and her innate reflexes in resurrecciòn is such that ‘Enhanced Previsión’ can trigger a reaction which contains directional components even when the Fracciòn isn’t aware of the imminent threat, as long as her head keeps releasing and receiving feedbacks from the pulses of spiritual energy which spreads across the vicinity and touches everything within its range at once.
The bolded part slightly reveals the instantaneous effect of the ability. The transmitted data triggers a reaction in respect to the obtain information. That's why it could be used against her.

Pertaining the the distance of Enhanced Relocation, I believe since the area of influence of this ability in her sealed state was 50m, her unsealed state (resurecciòn/shikai) is safe to have an extra distance buff. But well, since you don't find it okay to have control over things within that said distance, I'll reduce it to 70m or back to 50m, I really don't have a problem with that, but I hope im not the only one been limited to this distance in shikai.
That said, I'll edit in the part where she could loose control over objects if she gets distracted.

With that are the abilities ready to rumble? :)
I've read through. I still don't see how fast it lets you respond to oncoming attacks, because, you could just be like 'data gotten, zoom! Threat evaded'. I don't really care about the part of it being used against her, intelligent minds can use the works of a zanpakuto against the user except for those with strict immunity.

For the second, if your ability reach is grossing 150m, I wonder what your bankai would cover, distance-wise. And in your case of 'I hope I'm not the only one being limited to distance', you're certainly the only one being limited, mine stretches to such length but it is by no means offensive, all it does is up my senses to sense everything around a 150m radius, others have a limit of 90m even in bankai. I don't think it is a good idea to remove that piece of weakness that makes this ability even more acceptable. If anything, I could allow the distance it covers to be 70m at most. If you intend to remove the 'distraction limitation', keep in mind there must be another limitation that covers up for it while it covers 50m.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

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Post by PhoenixDayne » Mon Dec 10, 2018 3:33 pm

SlimJellal wrote:
Sun Nov 18, 2018 5:07 am

Resurrection: Elements [Ice and Size Manipulation]

Tsukane let's go of his blade while uttering the words Get Em or simply uttering the words even without holding on to the blade itself after which Hielo pequeño proceeds to evaporate into thin Air and a large burst of Reiatsu is let out which completely obscures the entirety of Tsukane after which the burst of energy comes to a sudden and immediate stop revealing a new design to his person, the remnant of his hollow mask proceeds to cover both his arms making them much more durable than usual, his toes becoming claws/talons. Wings made of ice similar to that of a Dragon in shape and a 2m are now attached to his body as extra bodily appendages which allows him total control of them as he can move them in any way and can even move or control both wings to perform different movements at the same time, it is to be added that these wings are sturdy and durable enough to act as shields and only get stronger with the more Reiatsu is channeled into them and should a case of them being damaged it repairs itself with in the presence of cold and with Tsukane this is not even a problem so long as he's willing to expend reiatsu  to ensure the damage is repaired. His tail can be controlled fully like any other body part and allows him grab unto things or persons as he can control it just as good as his hands and legs. In this activated State every physical or energy based ability employed by Tsukane retains the property of coldness, an example is if a Cero or Bala is fired and hits a target it has an extra effect of freezing up the target
Overly explained.
You could've simply said, your usage with your tail is as good as when you're using your arms or whatever.
A pair of extremely durable, dragon-like wings are attached to his back, that tends to stronger and repair itself if broken through reiatsu channelling, a 2m tail is now attached to his body, which he can use as though it was a limb.
That ain't wordy, simple and concise.

Ice Manipulation: Grants The user the ability create, shape and manipulate ice, water frozen into a solid state and appears naturally in forms of snow, slush, hail, icicles, ice spikes and candles, glaciers, pack ice, frost, and polar ice caps, and cold by reducing the kinetic energy of atoms and thus making things colder, for various effects and combinations,reduce the kinetic energy of atoms and thus making them cooler which can range from simply cooling to completely freezing over depending on the effort put into the ability. In environments which are Naturally cold this makes Tsukane like a fish in water as he can freely manipulate the already existing cold with lesser effort,Tsukane is completely unaffected by the cold, while objects can be frozen to the point of shattering and even energy can be affected by the cold(Kido, cero and things created by energy), this ability used to it's fullest can freeze over even the hottest fire or lava. as simply releasing this ability freezes the floor or surface on which Tsukane is standing over a 50meter radius making walking or running difficult for others to accomplish.  Physical contact from Tsukane leaves behind frostbites on wherever or whoever is touched, slowing down body metabolism and making objects brittle and the devastating effects of this Zanpakuto can be felt within 200 meters of himself and this allows Tsukane determine the location of any sentient being within this range due to the heat their body generates internally]
Won't really consider this if it isn't taking a technique slot or is it your unreleased? Again, overly explained. We don't really need to know how Tsukane feels, I need just what the ability is capable of.
Already, I have a couple of problems with this. If it is an unreleased, then the following is likely impossible.
; Freezing even the hottest fire and lava which will most likely put the bankai of Darius to shame; No offense there, Aegis Raiu.
; The 200m, which even for a segunda etapa/bankai is absurd.
It'd be far neater if you use bullets.
You can shape, thats one.
Reduce the kinetic expansivity of atoms, that's two.
Making movement difficult, that's three.
Sensing, four.
I really don't have problems with them, all they need is bullets.
Size Manipulation: This ability simply allows Tsunake to drastically reduce or increase his general body size at the mere thought of it, this ability is limited to Tsukane himself but can be extended to anything generated from his energy or reiatsu while sentient beings other than Tsukane himself cannot be affected by this ability in any way, other inanimate objects or non sentient or non living things in general can be affected only after physical contact has been made and the required amount of reiatsu has been channeled into said object in question.
Wordy. Tsunake can vary his size at will and its effect can be experienced by nonliving matter upon contact, he's incapable of affecting other sentient life with this ability. This he uses in tandem with his energy/reiatsu based attacks
That is short and easy to understand.
Then the limitations comes into play with bullets.
Fine for the most part.
 Ability 1: Armadura Imperial

Element: Ice manipulation

This is the first ability of Frías manos de la muerte which provides Tsukane with an armor of extremely durable Ice constituting extreme cold that immediately slows down anything that comes within 10 meters of his person.  And even if contact is managed the armor does a lot to prevent Tsukane from being damaged.
Alright.
with 80% of the cold concentrated within 3 meters of his person which makes everything within this range completely freeze over and sentient beings are completely frozen in place making it almost impossible to make contact with Tsukane
So, they're just frozen in place. The opponent can't resist or fight off the cold even without fire as his or her element?
The armor can repair itself in the presence of cold or water in any form be it liquid, Vapor in the atmosphere or ice itself but reiatsu has to be expended to carry out this process depending on how much damage
Quite alright.
The armor completely destroyed can only be donned twice again before the ability is forcefully deactivated and has to be reactivated
When the armor gets destroyed the second time, your zanpakuto reverts to his sealed, correct?
All fire attacks or heat related attacks are nullified up to 50%
High reward, high risk.
There needs to be something that compensate for this buff. A balance is required.
Due to the constant and extreme temperature changes of being around Tsukane, the sudden and heavy pressure drop in temperature can cause people to become sick, dizzy, disoriented and/or weak. In the presence of extreme cold, victims feel numb, their senses dulled and reaction times delayed.
An absolute effect? I hope not.
Ability 2: Reducción de talla:
Element: Size Manipulation

This is a simple ability that allows Tsukane alter the size of the entirety of his body and not just selected body parts. The change in size occurs instantly and allows Tsukane reduce and revert to normal on a whim and at a moment's notice
Ah! I see possibilities of how this ability could be used for stealth. Again, too wordy.
At will, Tsukane can vary his size which occurs at a nigh instantaneous rate.
Accepted. Any problem that arises in the future will be dealt with.
This ability allows Tsukane reduce his already small body size even smaller, any size between 1cm and his normal height of 3 feet is achievable
Ah, 1cm. That is a bit too little, I've done massive research and this is simply too little.
For Objects to fall under the effects of this spell, physical contact is needed to channel the reiatsu
Accepted
Tsukane retains all his physical attributes such as speed, durability and strength etc notwithstanding any size he's in
I was waiting for this.
No. No. No. Speed, durability. Alright. The strength is an issue.
This ability can also be employed on energy based techniques but only that of Tsukane himself
Fine.

[quotemAbility 3: Objetos Fríos:

Element: Ice Manipulation

This ability provides Tsukane with the dexterity to form his Ice into constructs of Various shapes and sizes instantly and at will from any part of his body but is limited only to simple objects like Shields, Walls, Hammers and the likes but more complex objects like automobiles and sentient beings are out of the reach of this ability. The ice constructs themselves are sturdy to the point they put their normal counterparts to shame[/quote]
Fine.
Constructs can be remotely manipulated with simple hand or body gestures or mentally across a distance of 30 meters in any direction
Fine.
Object weight cannot exceed 100kg in total, from hundreds of tiny ice shards to large blocks of ice, the limited weight cannot exceed 100kg
Alright.
Durability of objects are proportional to amount of reiatsu invested
Decent.
Objects manifest and move at one speed level lower than that of Tsukane
Decision rebuked. I've seen how fast your character is, 'the one level lower than Tsukane's speed' is too much as your core abilities aren't telekinesis and cold manipulation, hence, your mental control over ice can't be that fast. At least the lesser the number and lesser the weight, the faster they could move, arriving at speed that are two levels lower than his'
That's even for a singular construct.
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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

#113

Post by Kira-duh-savage » Tue Dec 11, 2018 1:19 am

Futsunushi (戦争の神, ''War god'' ;Viz ''god of combat''): In its sealed state, Futsunushi possesses a relatively simple and plain design. It is a regular katana in both appearance and blade length, with a star shaped cross guard and dark red hilt.

Futsunushi's shikai.
Shikai: Unlike most Zanpakutō, Futsunushi has two Shikai commands, each producing a distinct effect. The first is ''Dilute'' (希釈, Kishaku) and the second is ''Increase'' (強化する, Nōdo). When activated, Futsunushi's appearance retains the normalcy of its sealed state. No notable changes take place.

Shikai Special Ability.

Kinesis; Futsunushi can manipulate the vectors of kinetic energy. It can alter the kinetic properties of an object to achieve a desired result.
Overview
• Futsunushi can create, shape and manipulate kinetic energy. The energy possessed by a moving object.
Sub-Powers

Kinetic Energy Negation: Futsunushi can negate the kinetic energy of objects.
Mechanics
• Futsunushi can negate the kinetic energy of anything, causing them to lose momentum, velocity and striking power.
• The ability is activated when the user issues the Shikai command ''Dilute''.
• The weakening in physical force does not only affect an object's kinetic energy, but also extends similarly to its associated/derivative energy and forces.
• Tactile contact with the user of this ability is not mandatory for an object to be subject to its effects.
Even simply coming into contact with the user's reiatsu would suffice. Though, for remote applications like this there is ordinarily a fixed range of influence: 5 metres. Which can be regulated to an extent at the expense of reiatsu.
• The degree as to which an object's kinetic properties can be negated depends on the reiatsu/reiatsu control differential between said object and the user.
•The ability can be channelled through Kidō. Preferably the defensive kind. Bakudō. And in so doing the user can pseudo-enhance their defensive capabilities drastically. However, it is more easy to do this with low to mid level spells than spells that the user can not cast without incantation; high level spells.
Kinetic Energy Amplification; Futsunushi can amplify the kinetic energy of objects.
Mechanics
• Futsunushi can amplify the kinetic energy of anything, making them stronger and more effective. More dangerous.
• The ability is activated when the user issues the Shikai command ''Increase.''
• The ability can be used to enhance the damage that the user's physical strikes can cause to a conflicting object. By amplifying the kinetic energy of those strikes. This is not to be confused with Enhanced Physical Strength as the user's muscle capacity remains the same.
• The ability can be channelled through Kidō. Preferably the offensive kind. Hadō. And in so doing the user can pseudo-enhance their offensive capabilities drastically. However, it is more easy to do this with low to mid level spells than spells that the user can not cast without incantation; high level spells
• The degree as to which something's kinetic energy can be enhanced depends on the reiatsu the user expends.
• The ability has a cool down time of 4 posts after being used twice. However, this duration might drastically increase should the user have overly amplified something's kinetic energy at a prior period.

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Re: Zanpakutou Workshop

#114

Post by PhoenixDayne » Wed Dec 12, 2018 2:29 pm

SlimJellal

After certain researches and going through your character profile, my decisions have been made. Go through your zan review to view the changes.
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